Bomb Girl – Chapter 2

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Chapter 2 of my new story, ‘Bomb Girl’ is now up on Wattpad. Just click the link. All feedback would be much appreciated. Also if you like the story and want to follow the story of the ‘Bomb Girl,’ Ariana Hennessy, then feel free to follow me on Wattpad or reboot the post.

Thank you and enjoy!

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      1. I felt I could relate to the main character. Wanting to blend in, start over and have a normal life.

        Curious to see how the relationship with her new friend will work out.

        Vivid descriptions that paint the picture from the from how it all began to present day. You leave just enough out that I want to read more.

        Very easy to read.

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  1. I had an error message but it corrected itself within a few seconds. And then I read it thrice 😀. It helps me to absorb the very delightful Irish English. It is YA yes?
    Tess is a hoot. I look forward to seeing who Ariana is, away from home, away from bomb girl.

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      1. Lol. Well. If I’m just reading for pleasure I would note the vernacular of non American English and just enjoy it. Brits and Irish use “university, rubbish, bloody hell, loo, Kip” etc…I love that stuff. And also non American English sounds more proper in general. Unless you’re reading a clockwork orange. But if I’m thinking critically about the work I want to absorb the language and how it applies to the genre and characters. (American wouldn’t require the extra step). So…I get the sense I am reading a ya /na story but am not 100%.

        Some of my rewrites were from lack of a clear “audience” in mind. I started writing an adult story that didn’t match. It really was ya because the mc has a coming of age arc. Then I thought I’d call it new adult. But they say you shouldn’t market that yourself. Anyway. I have a ya story written with the goal of a ya audience. Does this make sense?

        I like the dialogue between Tess and Ariana over muffins. Her larger than life friend with pop culture catchphrases is vivid right away. I get a sense that Ariana is a slow reveal. She is uncertain of who she is aside from bomb girl. I look forward her self discovery unfolding and following it with her.

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        1. Thank you. Kirkwood Scott is much more of the same. Except more Belfast street speak. My Australian editor was forever querying it. Yes, yours definitely sits comfortably in the YA genre. Maybe NA? Tess was literally written off the top of my head. Ariana has required a lot more thought. She’s definitely still a work in progress. Still waters run deep.

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          1. So I’ll need to look up slang when I read it. Noted. I love the flavor of local dialect when I’m reading.
            Yes. I definitely think I’m set for YA. There are some themes that made me question that, but setting my genre has helped. I do recommend it.
            Young MCs with wisdom in their eyes and knowledge in their head are very good indeed.

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              1. Ugh. Sorry. Thats the worst. Was that just a query or a request? Do you feel your stats are decent? Request/reject ratio? Are your getting more feedback when you query with pages or with just the query?

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  2. In lieu of a reply rejection, some agents post on Twitter that they are done with queries thru a certain date to indicate that if you fall prior to this date, you are rejected. It’s a small step above no reply means no.

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