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Chapter 2 of my new story, ‘Bomb Girl’ is now up on Wattpad. Just click the link. All feedback would be much appreciated. Also if you like the story and want to follow the story of the ‘Bomb Girl,’ Ariana Hennessy, then feel free to follow me on Wattpad or reboot the post.
Thank you and enjoy!
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We are Stephen and Fionnuala and this is our story. We live in Northern Ireland, have been married for 17 years and have three kids - Adam, Hannah and Rebecca.
We hope that our story will inspire and encourage others. We have walked a rocky road yet here we are today, together and stronger than ever. We are far from perfect and our faith has been battered and bruised.
But an untested faith is a pointless faith. Just as a fractured faith is better than none at all.
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Link is not working for me
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Same for me
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Sorry to hear that. I’ve checked it several times and it’s working fine at this end.
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Enjoying this!!
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Thank you again.
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I am enjoying this story.
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Thank you. What do you like so far? I’m keen for feedback 🙂
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I enjoy your style of writing and there’s already a good bit of intrigue building which makes me want to continue reading.
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Thank you. That’s so encouraging to hear 😊
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Very good!
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Thank you. What did you like about it? I’m keen for feedback 😊
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I felt I could relate to the main character. Wanting to blend in, start over and have a normal life.
Curious to see how the relationship with her new friend will work out.
Vivid descriptions that paint the picture from the from how it all began to present day. You leave just enough out that I want to read more.
Very easy to read.
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Thank you very much. That’s really encouraging to hear 😊
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I had an error message but it corrected itself within a few seconds. And then I read it thrice 😀. It helps me to absorb the very delightful Irish English. It is YA yes?
Tess is a hoot. I look forward to seeing who Ariana is, away from home, away from bomb girl.
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Thrice? I’m verily honoured, forsooth. Delighted you like it. Hmmmm YA? I’m never quite sure if I write YA or NA? Or just Adult. Irish English? What bits of dialogue did you like?
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Lol. Well. If I’m just reading for pleasure I would note the vernacular of non American English and just enjoy it. Brits and Irish use “university, rubbish, bloody hell, loo, Kip” etc…I love that stuff. And also non American English sounds more proper in general. Unless you’re reading a clockwork orange. But if I’m thinking critically about the work I want to absorb the language and how it applies to the genre and characters. (American wouldn’t require the extra step). So…I get the sense I am reading a ya /na story but am not 100%.
Some of my rewrites were from lack of a clear “audience” in mind. I started writing an adult story that didn’t match. It really was ya because the mc has a coming of age arc. Then I thought I’d call it new adult. But they say you shouldn’t market that yourself. Anyway. I have a ya story written with the goal of a ya audience. Does this make sense?
I like the dialogue between Tess and Ariana over muffins. Her larger than life friend with pop culture catchphrases is vivid right away. I get a sense that Ariana is a slow reveal. She is uncertain of who she is aside from bomb girl. I look forward her self discovery unfolding and following it with her.
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Thank you. Kirkwood Scott is much more of the same. Except more Belfast street speak. My Australian editor was forever querying it. Yes, yours definitely sits comfortably in the YA genre. Maybe NA? Tess was literally written off the top of my head. Ariana has required a lot more thought. She’s definitely still a work in progress. Still waters run deep.
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So I’ll need to look up slang when I read it. Noted. I love the flavor of local dialect when I’m reading.
Yes. I definitely think I’m set for YA. There are some themes that made me question that, but setting my genre has helped. I do recommend it.
Young MCs with wisdom in their eyes and knowledge in their head are very good indeed.
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I got another rejection last night so was a bit disheartened. It really means a lot to be encouraged by yourself and fellow writers when 99% of agent feedback is bland, generic meh.
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Ugh. Sorry. Thats the worst. Was that just a query or a request? Do you feel your stats are decent? Request/reject ratio? Are your getting more feedback when you query with pages or with just the query?
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Just a query but that ratio has taken a bit of a battering this week. I rarely get personal feedback, just generic rejections. Oh well.
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Darn. Hopefully that will turn around soon. How about those rejections that are just posted on Twitter? “I’ve read thru queries thru x date”. Those are fun.
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What are they?
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In lieu of a reply rejection, some agents post on Twitter that they are done with queries thru a certain date to indicate that if you fall prior to this date, you are rejected. It’s a small step above no reply means no.
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That’s so cold.
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It is but for me, dear author and absolutely nothing are pretty equal no?
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Yeah, it all sucketh muchly
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I love the title! “Bomb Girl” such a cool name.
I’m checking you out on wattpad now.
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Thank you. Let me know what you think 🙂
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